My Taniwha - Writing

For the past few weeks we have been practising descriptive language in our writing. We have been trying to paint pictures with words. We all got to invent our own taniwha and than we had to draw our own taniwha. Then we had to write about, and describe  what it looks like.  Then we read our work to a buddy and they had to draw it.

Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard - Taniwha)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Kaitiaki O Aotearoa

Have you ever heard of a Taniwha called Kaitiaki o Aotearoa?

Well I have.  He is a fierce, tough, and a  brave Taniwha. He looks after………

Tangaroa the god of the moana, Ranginui the sky father, the Hokioi  bird  and Papatūānuku and her little baby called Ruaumoko.

You are probably wondering what Kaitiaki o Aotearoa looks like.

Well he is the shape of our beautiful country New Zealand.  Kaitiaki o Aotearoa is standing upright (portrait) on a slight tilt.

Up the North there is his power, a unicorn horn and above that there is one deformed reindeer horn too.  Kaitiaki o Aotearoa has two sparkling blue and white wings glued to his back, also his legs are very strong with hooves at the bottom of his feet.  His legs are also a delicate blue. Kaitiaki o Aotearoa has sharp teeth to kill enemies and has one black  eye. Kaitiaki o Aotearoa has kowhai and kikorangi as  the  colour of his body. Kaitiaki o Aotearoa has

korus for his arms and tail. His arms are blue and his tail is yellow.  He stomps around to show whos boss.

My Taniwha takes me down deep into a rainbow portal to his friend’s sausage sizzles.  My sausage is as yummy as hot cross buns on Easter  with melted chocolate.  My  Taniwha lives in the clouds with the birds.  I love my Taniwha because he guards me from people and he gives me gifts and hugs.

This is Dakota’s Version of my Taniwha.                                             My drawing of my taniwha.                                                                

                                                                                      

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer:  Dakota.

What I think you did well:  Putting lots of maori words in your writing.

What I think you could improve on: I can’t find anything wrong or that you need to work on.

Self Evaluation

What I think I did well:Describing my taniwha.

What I could improve on: Punctuation.